Sunday, September 20, 2015

He Makes Me Feel (a poem)

An author friend has encouraged me to write more poetry. Poetry isn't my genre. But I know I can share this with you...


photo by Leanne Dyck

He Makes Me Feel

Oh, the way he makes me feel
He makes me feel happy when I'm blue

Oh, the way he makes me feel
He buys me pretty things and tells me he loves me

Oh, the way he makes me feel
He takes me out to eat and we dance

Oh, the way he makes me feel
I see the way he looks at her
know
he 
wants
to...

Oh, the way he makes me feel
I come back from the bathroom
He's holding her in his eyes
He's touching her

Oh, the way he makes me feel
I can't be here any more
I have to leave

Oh, the way he makes me feel
He finally comes home
drunk
smelling of her

Oh, the way he makes me feel
I tell him that it can't be this way
It's either her or
her or
her or
me

Oh, the way he makes me feel
He hits the wall
the bureau
me
His fist into my belly
My navel up into my chest

Oh, the way he makes me feel
The next day, I can tell he's sorry for what he's done

Oh, the way he makes me feel
It's my fault
I pushed him over the edge
It's all my fault

Oh, the way he makes me feel
He makes me feel happy when I'm blue

Oh, the way he makes me feel
He buys me pretty things and tells me he loves me

photo by Leanne Dyck


Next post...
I attended a Crime Writers of Canada event last Saturday.

click to embolden

This was an information-rich talk give by two editors. I'll process this information and report back in my next post.


Sharing my author journey...

I shared a new picture book manuscript with my writers' group.
One comment:  'I don't think anyone will publish a story about kids jumping off a roof regardless of ending'.
What do you think?
In search of another opinion, I emailed a children's author friend.

Her comment:  'Keep in mind it is the parents and grandparents that buy the books and if they think it teaches kids to do dangerous things then they may not buy it.'

Just because you can write a story doesn't mean you should. When you write picture books you are writing for two audiences -- the child and the adult.





3 comments:

Darlene said...

Your poem could be a country and western song! Perhaps you will take up song writing next. All the best.

Leanne Dyck said...

LOL Ah, nope. Just stretching my writer muscles. Thank you for starting my week with a laugh. : )

Laurie Buchanan said...

Leanne — I absolutely agree with Darlene. Ditto that!